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篇一:英語批改網作文

英語作文的批改範文與評語

The person I love/ admire most

要求

1. No less than 90 points by Pigai.

2. No less than 26o words.

3. Deadline Nov. 3.

作文號:357928 教師:邵春 字數:260~500 滿分:100

Attitude

要求

For this part,you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay entitled Attitude by commenting on the famous saying, “A man can succeed at almost anything for which he has unlimited enthusiasm .” You should write at least 260 words but no more than 500 words.

作文號:357929 教師:邵春 字數:100~500 滿分:100

第一篇

The person I love/ admire most

Everyone has someone in his heart that he admires most, who may be a scientist, a writer, a musician or a movie super star. But,as for me,the most admirable person of mine is Christian Ronaldo, who is one of the greatest football player in today's world. Ronaldo was born in 1985, He was played for the Manchester united and now plays for real Madrid, when he was 18 years old he became a main force of Portugal national team. As for the world’s most brilliant super football stars, he not only has a handsome appearance, also has a special skill and efficient scoring ability. However, this is not reason why I admire him, the really point let me be his fans is his gratitude feelings and persistence of perseverance.

Ronaldo is a tender feelings man under his tough appearance,the most important things he teach me is that we should gratitude everyone who ever helped us, When he was 18,of which playing for Manchester united,even though he has unparalleled football talent,he was always neither well with team cooperation, nor handle for his applause and criticism. At this time, the Manchester united coach Sir Alex ferguson give most patient guidance to him. Latter, When Ronaldo every time honored, he always expresses his gratitude to Alex ferguson.“He is just like my father and friend!”

Moreover, another point he inspired me is his persistence for his persuit. From a youth to the leader of the national football team, Ronaldo is always to spare no effort to devote his time and energy, and as for the life of football. He is always the first came to the training ground, the last to leave. Now, he is nearly thirty years old, but he still keep the highest level on the field.

In sum, it is my general description about Christian Ronaldo above, I learn to be an gratitude person with strong mind from he. no pains, no gains. Only when you work hard, you can come true your dream. These lessons exercise a great influence on my life. Ronaldo, thank you so much for not only giving interest of football to me but also teaching me how to be a good person. Recently, the New Year's golden ball players will reveal, Ronaldo remains at the top, all is own to his gratitude mentality and uemitting persistence, and I will continue to give my greatest respect, Hala Madrid!

The person I admire most

Everyone has someone in his heart that he admires most, who may be a scientist, a writer, a musician or a movie super star. But, as for me, the most admirable person of mine is my dearest mother. My mother is an ordinary woman. She is not very beautiful and a little heavy as well as me. But sometimes, you will think she is very kind and enthusiastic. Although she doesn’t have high education, she is very capable. She is excellent in social contact and bargaining. She loves me and my brother, tries to give us the comfortable surroundings to study and live in. She is a sensible person, but she can’t stand someone screwing the number of my family over. No one in the world loves you more than your mother. While she gave me life, she takes me as her concern. She devotes her whole life to the family. I learn to be an optimistic person with strong mind from my mother. She also teaches me that no pains, no gains. Only when you work hard, you can come true your dream. These lessons exercise a great influence on my ough my mother is an ordinary person, she is still the person that I admire most. Mom, thank you so much for not only giving birth to me but also teaching me how to be a good person. No matter what will be in the future, I will always love you.

第二篇

Altitude

It is said “A man can succeed at almost anything for which he has unlimited enthusiasm!”,we can known how altitude play a important role to our success. A person who even though take a extraordinary talent, he will hard to get outstanding achievement without a good altitude to his work or study.

These are two causes why a positive altitude is so significant to our career,on the one hand, we can build a strong confidence from a good mental state facing unpredictable challenges,in turn, which will unleash your

unlimited enthusiasm to push you to devote time and energy to your work. Beethoven, who is the greatest composer and pianist in the history of music,who also is a blind man at the same time,even if so, he was optimistic in the facing of life, come over all blocks we can not image with a strong determination ,and finally compose the many wonderful music . On the other hand, as the saying goes, “Failure is the mother of success”, but I think it better to say,”Failure will always around you without a good attitude!”,there is no doubt that it is be so difficult for us to succeed. When I was third grade in primary school, it was very popular for us learning play the guitar, Before that, I have had some music knowledge due to study for a year, for which , I don't have to go to learn to play guitar with a good altitude, of course, in the end, those who had not studied or without any basis students learn better than me under the positive and careful study. So it is a enthusiastic attitude that make their life full of music and make goal has been achieved.

In sum, which the factors of success dominated by altitude after all Confidence, optimistic, courage or all above Perhaps,it is not necessary for us to discuss the answer to it, because someone have adjust a good altitude to facing their life,stress and work ,when you are consider this question.

篇二:句酷批改網作文範文

標題:大學生參加社會實踐

字數: 不低於100字並且不高於500 字

滿分: 100

要求:

For this part,you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay entitled College Students Should Take Part in Social Practice following the outline given below. You should write at least 120 words but no more than 180 words.

1、 很多大學生缺乏社會實踐

2、 大學生應該參加社會實踐

3、 我的觀點

範文:According to a survey, in recent years, many universities ignored the phenomenon that college students did not have enough chance to take part in social practice leaded to they lacked the ability to adapt to society in the future. When we asked college students whether they had engaged in social practice, most of them said no. I take it for granted that social practice can bring many benefits to college student. In the first instance, social practice can offer students adequate chance to meet various people in society. They can accumulate enough experience and use it in the future career. The second thing that must be taken into consideration is that it is a great opportunity for them put theory into practice and improve their In a word, I take the attitude that social practice is a critical thing for university students and they should also learn how to balance between study and work.

標題:Five(Three) Famous Symbols of Chinese Culture

字數: 不低於100字並且不高於500 字

滿分: 100

要求:

字數200字左右,須有中心,圍繞一箇中心選取三至五個具有中國特徵的事物描寫

As we know, China is one of the countries with the longest history of ancient civilization in the world. Our ancestors made a contribution to our country even world with a wealth of cultural legacy.

One of the famous symbols of Chinese Culture is the Yellow River. It is the second longest river in China and considered as Mother river of Chinese individual. It is generally recognized that Huang Di was born here and Nu Wa was made by mud from Yellow River.

Chinese knot is also a famous symbol in culture. Our ancestors used it to record things but now it is mainly used for decoration in the Favorite Spring. It must be emphasized that Chinese knot represents love, harmony and marry.

The last symbol that must be taken into consideration is The Great Wall. The Great Wall was built by ordinary people to avoid other countries attacking ourselves at the beginning. It is called as world miracle was made by intelligent individual.

The Yellow River, Chinese knot and The Great Wall, represents Chinese outstanding culture and it is just a part of the Chinese excellent culture. I hope everyone from the world could learn

the acknowledgeable about Chinese culture.

篇三:批改網作文翻譯參考譯文

標題:扇子

字數: 不低於100字並且不高於300 字

滿分: 100

原文:

扇子是一種用來撥動空氣以使人感到涼快的工具。中國扇文化有著深厚的文化底蘊,它與竹文化、佛教文化有著密切關係。自古以來,中國就有“制扇王國”之稱。扇子的主要材料包括竹、木、紙等。扇子造型優美,構造精緻,經能工巧匠精心製作而成。文人墨客常在上面題詩作畫,使其具有很高的藝術價值。在古代,扇子還是權力的象徵。中國扇子還流傳到其他一些國家,並對那裡的文化產生了一定的影響。 參考譯文:A fan is an implement used to stir airflow to make people feel cool. Chinese fan culture has deep cultural deposits and it has a close relationship with bamboo culture and Buddhist culture. Since ancient times, China has had the name of “the kingdom of making fans”. The main materials of fans include bamboo, wood, paper, etc. Fans have appealing designs and delicate structures, and are made elaborately by skilful craftsmen. Men of literature and writing often write poems and create paintings on them, making them have very high art values. In ancient times, the fan was also the symbol of power. Chinese fans have also spread into many other countries and exerted a certain influence on the culture there.

標題:儒家和道家

字數: 不低於100字並且不高於300 字

滿分: 100

原文:

反映在藝術和文學中的鄉村生活理想是中國文明的重要特徵。這在很大程度上歸功於道家(Taoist)對自然的感情。傳統中國畫有兩個最受青睞的主題,一是家庭生活的各種幸福場景,畫中往往有老人在下棋飲茶,男人在耕耘收割,婦女在織布縫衣,小孩在戶外玩耍。另一個則是鄉村生活的種種樂趣,畫有漁夫在湖上打漁,農夫在山上砍柴採藥,或是書生坐在松樹下吟詩作畫。這兩個主題可以分別代表儒家(Confucian)和道家的生活理想。

參考譯文:The ideal of rural life reflected in the art and literature is a key characteristic of Chinese civilization. To a large extent, it is attributed to Taoism’s emotions at nature. There are two most preferred themes in Chinese traditional paintings, one of which is various happy scenes in family life, often with the elderly playing chess or drinking tea, men plowing or

harvesting, women weaving cloth or sewing clothes, and kids playing outdoors in the

paintings. The other is all sorts of pleasure in rural life, with fishermen fishing in the lake, farmers cutting firewood or collecting medical herbs in the mountains, or scholars reciting poems or painting pictures sitting under pine trees in the paintings. The two themes respectively represent life ideals of Confucianism and Taoism.

標題:中國武術

字數: 不低於100字並且不高於300 字

滿分: 100

原文:

中國是東方武術的主要發源地,有著世界上獨一無二的“武文化”。中國武術又被稱為“功夫”,是中國傳統文化的很重要一環,是中國民族體育的主要內容之一,是幾千年來中國人民用以鍛鍊身體和自衛的一種方法。以往,人們只能在一些書中或者表演中感受到中國武術的影響力,現在它的.影響力已經體現在一些電影電視中,有了更多的觀眾群體。中國武術已經傳播到國外,吸引了全世界的廣泛關注。

參考譯文:As one of the main birth places of Oriental martial arts, China has the unique

"martial culture" in the world. Chinese martial arts, also known as Kung Fu, is an important component of Chinese culture, a major part of Chinese national sport, as well as a way for Chinese people to build their bodies and defend themselves over the past thousands of years. In the past, the influence of Chinese martial arts could be felt only in books or performances. Nowadays, the influence has found expression in some movies and television programs, so that it is reaching a much wider audience. As a result, Chinese martial arts have spread beyond China’s borders and captured the wide attention of the people around the world.

標題:年輕人旅遊

字數: 不低於100字並且不高於300 字

滿分: 100

原文:

越來越多的中國年輕人正在對旅遊產生興趣,這是近年來的新趨勢。年輕遊客數量的不斷增加,可以歸因於他們迅速提高的收入和探索外部世界的好奇心。隨著旅行多了,年輕人在大城市和著名景點花的時間少了,他們反而更為偏遠的地方所吸引。有些人甚至選擇長途揹包旅行。最近調查顯示,很多年輕人想要通過旅行體驗不同的文化、豐富知識、擴充套件視野。

參考譯文:More and more Chinese young people are gaining interest in tourism, which is a new trend recently. The rising number of young tourists can be attributed to their rapidly

increasing income and the curiosity of exploring the outside world. With the increase of traveling, young people spend less time in big cities and famous scenic spots, instead they are more attracted by remote locations. Some even choose long-distance backpacking trip. A recent survey shows that many young people want to experience different culture, eich knowledge and expand their horizon via traveling.

標題:網購

字數: 不低於100字並且不高於300 字

滿分: 100

原文:

越來越多的中國網際網路使用者發現了網購的樂趣。中國網際網路絡資訊中心稱,上半年有超過8700萬的中國人網路購物,這意味著四分之一的中國網民有網路購物的經歷。大多數網路購物者為18--30歲的學生和白領,月收入在1000--3000元不等。女性網購多於男性。衣服和家用產品是在網上購買最多的東西。預計網路購物這一趨勢在將來只增不減,這反映出中國經濟的強勁發展勁頭。

參考譯文:A growing number of Chinese Internet users have discovered the joy of online shopping. The China Internet Network Information Center(CNNIC) announced that more than 87 million Chinese made purchase on the Internet in the first half year, which means one out of four Chinese netizens have online shopping experience. Most online shoppers are students and white-collar workers aged 18 to 30 with a monthly income of 1,000 yuan to 3,000 yuan. Women shop online more than men do. Clothing and home-use products are the most popular goods bought online. It is predicted that the trend of online shopping will grow rather than drop in the future. This reveals the strong development momentum of China 's economy.

標題:生命的意義

字數: 不低於100字並且不高於300 字

滿分: 100

原文:

一個人的生命究竟有多大意義這有什麼標準可以衡量嗎提出一個絕對的標準當然很困難但是大體上看一個人對待生命的態度是否嚴肅認真看他對待勞動、工作等等的態度如何也就不難對這個人的存在意義做出適當的估計了。古來一切有成就的人都很嚴肅地對待自己的生命當他活著一天總要儘量多勞動、多工

作、多學習不肯虛度年華不讓時間白白地浪費掉。我國曆代的勞動人民及大政治家、大思想家等等都莫不如此。

參考譯文:How significant is a person's lifeIs there any standard to measureIt It will be very difficult to put forward an absolute standard but in general the significance of one's existence can be estimated by how he treats his life, by what attitude he takes to work and what ways he chooses to live. From ancient times up to now all the accomplished people treat their lives very seriously. They work and learn as much as possible. They hate to spend the best of their lives in vain and they do not want to let their time slip by. All the laboring people, great statesmen and thinkers of our country at all ages treasure their time in this way.

標題:教育與就業

字數: 不低於100字並且不高於300 字

滿分: 100

原文:

中國將努力確保到2015年就業者接受過平均13.3年的教育。如果這一目標得以實現,今後大部分進入勞動力市場的人都需獲得大學文憑。在未來幾年,中國將著力增加職業學院的招生人數:除了關注高等教育外,還將尋找新的突破以確保教育制度更加公平。中國正在努力最佳地利用教育資源,這樣農村和欠發達地區將獲得更多的支援。教育部還決定改善欠發達地區學生的營養,併為外來務工人員的子女提供在城市接受教育的同等機會。

參考譯文:China will make an effort to ensure that employees receive an average of 13.3 years’ education by 2015. If the goal is to be achieved, most people entering the labor market must obtain a university diploma in the next few years, China will take great pains to increase the eolments of vocational colleges; apart from paying attention to higher education, China will also look for new breakthroughs to ensure more equality in the education system. China is striving to optimize educational resources so that rural and

underdeveloped areas will gain more Ministry of Education has also decided to improve the nutrition of students in underdeveloped areas and provide equal opportunities for the children of migrant workers to receive education in cities.

標題:Bats

字數: 不低於100字並且不高於500 字

滿分: 100

要求:

Write a summary of about 150 words.

Bats

by Debbie Dean

In the distant past, many people thought bats had

magical powers, but times have changed. Today, many people believe that bats are rodents, that they cannot see, and that they are more likely than other animals to carry rabies. All of these beliefs are mistaken. Bats are not rodents, are not blind, and are no more likely than dogs and cats to transmit rabies. Bats, in fact, are among the least understood and least appreciated of animals.

Bats are not rodents with wings, contrary to popular belief. Like all rodents, bats are mammals, but they have a skeleton similar to the human skeleton. The bones in bat wings are much like those in arms and the human hand, with a thumb and four fingers. In bats, the bones of the arms and the four fingers of the hands are very long. This bone structure helps support the web of skin that stretches from the body to the ends of the fingers to form wings.

篇四:批改學生英語作文的方法

批改學生英語作文的方法

濟水一中 許勤萍

英語小短文在會考中佔15分,佔分比例較高,如何提高學生英語寫作能力,教師的批改起著至關重要的作用,作文的批改和講評是寫作教學的最後一個環節,也是不可或缺的、極其重要的一個環節。但是,作為教師,教學任務繁重,每個學生每週作文都改的話,耗時長,反饋慢。在學生大量寫作並且班級人數很多的情況下,不一定每次每篇作文都要教師批改,但也決不是說根本不需要批改。通過批改,可以發現學生寫作中存在的問題,尤其是對普遍性問題要及時採取措施,組織適當練習進行糾正.針對學生寫的作文,我會採取以下步驟改: 1 、讓學生自己讀自己的文章,檢查有沒有錯誤並更正。 2 、同學互評,每組中都有一個後進生不會改作文,我讓他背書本3a的文章或單詞,其他人交換改,優等生改中等生,中等生改後進生,用紅筆圈出錯誤。

教師和學生均為教學的主體,學生之間應加強合作,互教互學。由於學生之間的相互瞭解更深刻,他們之間的相互交流往往能收到很好的效果。而當學生在意識到教師並不是他/她的文章唯一的讀者時,他們會更認真地寫好作文。因此,讓學生相互傳閱和修改作文不僅增加了寫作時的真實感,更重要的是訓練學生既做學生也做老師。在一個小組裡先聽別人讀出他的作文,再由自己讀自己的作文時,往往更能發現自己的不足之處。在平時作

文時,文章初稿寫出後最好請別人提意見,然後自己再進行修改。古人說:“不識廬山真面目,只緣身在此山中”。對自己文章的瑕疵常常不易很快覺察,而別人則“旁觀者清”。自己的文章請別人看,容易發現新的問題。當然,運用此法時須對他人意見進行消化、理解後才能進行修改。 3、個人針對別人對自己文章圈出的錯誤進行更正,不會的問老師、同學。

4 、重新寫這篇文章。

5 、老師抽查改,把共性錯誤收集起來寫在黑板上讓學生改錯。然後大聲讀正確句子兩遍。

6、 學生在5的基礎上基本已經知道了常規所犯的錯誤,然後自己檢查自己的短文,修改錯誤。大多數學生基本上能做到八九不離十,修改好自己的錯誤。我感覺這種方法很好。 7 、四人一組的組長改。

8、有時我也會提前把好生的文章寫在黑板上當範文讀,或者讓學生把出錯多的學生的文章寫在黑板上讓全班學生共同改錯。

9、有時我會面對面給學生進行作文反饋,當場指出學生錯誤之處,好的地方大加表揚,如好的開頭,好的句式,好的詞語等。

總之,批改學生作文,不時變換方法,既減輕了老師的負擔,又提高學生學習積極性,在作文批改中,以鼓勵為主,尤其對那

些成績較差的學生,教師就要抓住其優點,用略微誇張的感嘆句進行肯定和讚揚,順帶指出希望,這樣效果會好些。

篇五:句酷批改網作文3

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: People should sometimes do things they do not enjoy doing.

Use specific reasons and

examples to support your answer.

Time limit: 30 minutes;

Length: about 300 words. 作文號:539612 教師:範國華字數:100~500 滿分:100

ShouldPeople Sometimes Do Things They do not Enjoy Doing

As to the question, diffident people have diffident views. Some say not while others think the answer is yes, and in my mind, I agree with the latter. Yes, people should sometimes do things they do not enjoy doing, and the reason is very easy: we have to.

Frist, something we don’t enjoy may be helpful to us. Take me for example, when I was a kid, I don’t like study. I preferred to play free than go to school, but I have to receive nine years of compulsory education. I do not enjoy it but I really learned a lot in school.

Second, no rules, no justice. Something you may not enjoy, but if you do not do that, you will hunt others.

Last but not least, we have to do some things because it is our responsibility. When we have our own families, it’s our duty to make our families better, and we must do things we don’t enjoy to reach the goal. For example, maybe we have to take a boring job because we need to earn money to support our families.

In conclusion, we sometimes need to do things we do not enjoy, because we have to.

篇六:英文作文批改激勵性評語

英語作文激勵性評語

一、巨集觀性評價

1. 整體印象類評語

Super!Excellent!Perfect!Wonderful!Fantastic! Marvelous!

採用整體印象類評語對於起始階段的學生有較好的激勵作用,但若千篇一律德使用此類評語,就會使學生無法正確認識自己的寫作水平,最終導致教師的評語失去應有的作用。

2. 規範導知類評語

r. hand-writing.

You'er careful of using pronounciation.

Glad to see your improvement in handwriting.

I'm expecting clearer/more beautiful hand-writing from you next time.

YOu'd better pay more attention to word order.

Better be more careful of your spelling.

It's important to compose a draft beforhand.

3. 情感調控類評語

I appreciate your handwriting.

You have a good knowledge of English proverbs.

You are quite aware of making meaningful sentences.

You are richer than others in collecting and using typical sentences and idioms.

I'm expecting greater progress from you in writing. Come on.

If you need my help, never hesitate to come to me.

警句:

Hard work leads to success.

Not to advance is to go back.

No one is without faults.

Keeping is harder than winning. Keep it up.

二、微觀寫作技能方面的評語

1. 專項點撥類評語

It's proper to use the proverb in Para.2 Quite clever.

You are good at using attributive clauses in your writing.

The "struck" sentence is perfectly used.

You'd better use "third person" in the first para.

It's good to use the past tense in your writing.

2. 佳句欣賞類評語

教師可以在句尾統一標註讚美性的符號(如E--Excellent)或標識不同星級等。

What a wonderful sentence using "cover".

It's really clever of you to use this beautiful sentence.

The inverted sentence is well written.

3. 謀篇佈局類評語

A good beginning. A perfect ending. ectly-expanded.

The first para. makes a good beginning.

The last para. makes a perfect ending.

All the points have been covered.

It's clever of you to use a topic sentence at the beginning of a para.

It's wonderful to use proper conjunctions between sentences.

You are good at developing a para.

You have made great progress in developing a passage.

I am glad to see the sentence conherence in your last para.

Better pay more attention to the relationship between sentences.

It's really wonderful to start/end your sentences with adverbials.

在起始年級應側重對學生寫作行為規範的引領,重在對學生進行詞句方面的引導;對高年級學生則應側重對文章的結構、行文的邏輯、句子的變化等方面的指點和引導。

雖然這些評語對我們大部分學生來說不太適合,因為他們連老師評他們什麼都看不懂。但我們平時對作文的批改確實沒做到這麼仔細。有很大啟發!